My eyebrows shot up in astonishment; something I had not felt in a long and pleasantly uneventful incriment of time.
In the course of a second-the very moment my eyes met his, my world- the world seemed to grow profoundly dark.
Then a ray of florecense, a shimmering light, engolfed the boy I was gawking at and expanded into a tube.
In that same second time stood still, awkward and frozen. The Earth stopped mid-turn, tipping ever so slightly on its axis. Nearly completing a well-deserved turn, yet waiting to begin another.
To top it all off: a powerful yet beautiful chorus of cliché angels sang from every direction.
Then all too soon the world resumed its cold, bustling existence and I was no longer alone.
The angels stopped singing like tired babies and the darkness shrank back in what seemed like a secret fear.
Was it love? Was it hormones? Was there nobody who could give me the correct (and final) answer? Maybe one day I could inquire what he saw when he first looked at me, and raised his eyebrows in astonishment...
great literature i like the part with the world tilting great job
ReplyDelete-Ellis M.
Nice!
ReplyDeleteI can really see your personality reflected in this.
I feel like this represents a moment that most people can relate to, and you put your own spin on it, with the feeling ending so abruptly, leaving you to wonder what in the world just happened.
~Jasper
Wow, this is really good! I didn't know you could write like this, Cynthia! Your used of vocabulary is incredible! The story makes me wonder who it's about . . .
ReplyDeletebtw, if Kristen is reading this I forgot the blog password so i had to use my own account. This story was too fabulous not to comment on.
~Kali
Is anybody else having trouble posting comments?
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ReplyDeleteamazing story but i would like to know who it is about...
ReplyDeletetruly amazing
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